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The Land of Kings by ~Hydramus:iconHydramus:



Through the vast desolate sand where men rise,
Where scavengers peck at feet of heroes
And where kings rise and fall watching over
Like a mother watching over her child,
To rise or fall as warmongers or
To fill the spirits of peasants with love.
May the Gods be their witness for their fate
Of the countless lives behind special men,
They can see heroes rise like Achilles
Or a king who roams, who seeks to explore.

But here is the great Telemachus who
Watches over his people with much care,
Unlike his ungrateful father who left
Dear Penelope, Ithaca’s angel.
But he was away fighting his way home
From hunger from the lack of all their food,
With cunning thoughts he and his crew survived
The mighty Cyclops for his stash of food,
With help of gods to trick a sorceress,
To refuse the bitter-sweet melody
Of the mysterious Sirens with wax,
And escape the monstrous Scylla.

Cunning was Odysseus with great mind,
He escaped great perils and found a way
Still to trick her following men into
The trap to reclaim his old dusty throne.
So not his fault was his long time away,
For he did not find a quicker way home,
But now with the lust for his adventure
He feels the time to leave it all behind,
To travel again, maybe with his wife
Leaving it all to his son who seems to
Have done a job well done, maybe it will
Be better for his people to love him
Rather than himself.
©2005-2009 ~Hydramus
:iconhydramus:

Author's Comments

This is a poem we actaully had to do for english lit, and was to be shown today (or told whatever). And it had to be related to the poem "Ulyess" by Alfred, Lord Tennyson. I'd personally rather use the name "Odysseus" which is his greek name which sounds a lot cooler in my opinion 8-) but anyway! About the poem, was suppose to be like at least 10 lines she said but i got carried away and did a lot more... but i had fun anyways! i even looked up info about the guy and found a little about his adventures :D hehe probably why it made the poem longer...

But this poem was suppose to be in Iambic pentameter with 10 syllables per line (i know! the last one only has 5, i said i cheated :) ) with like 10 lines in each stanza, this was blank verse but i did cheat a tiny bit :) lol but i just felt like including all of it! i like it anyways except for the ending as much, but everyone still loved all of it so i thought ok nvm im gunna keep it like this and put it on here :D I just wish we could write poetry all the time for english sometimes :D lol that would be fun but i admit poetry isnt everyone's things, i seem to have my way with words ;) hehe Enjoy anyways! :D as always, please tell me what you think :) I have to admit, i found this poem quite difficult to write cos of the strict 10 syllable scheme hehe :D which i did brake in the end!

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:icondanielhill101:
Superb poem Josh, I love the first stanza especially the first two lines, it sounds really, really good.

Excellent job.

Dan

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Thanks man, i do love the first stanza the most as well, the rest kinda got worst as it went on i felt lol, but thanks, the Scanvangers btw if you didnt get it, were suppose to be the peasents if it makes sense hehe :) thanks. Read ellie's as well! muhahahaha! :D

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:iconglarawen:
Writing in iambic pentameter is a bitch!! But I've never been one for structure. How on earth did you write this so well? :XD: Seriously, the flow is amazing. Great wording too. Seriously in awe of this! :D

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Yeah i never really had a true structure as well in my poems usually but i just wrote it from me head! lol and with a lot of time on my hands :P lol but imm so used to writing poetry, it has become second nature to me hehe and that i do have problems with explaining stuff, that might have something to do with it lol. But cheers anyway :D hehe, im glad you enjoyed it :) Thanks again.

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:iconmoondarri:
You fucking rock. Seriously. This is one of my favourite poems by you (:+fav:). The words are beautiful, and you managed the iambic pentameter brilliantly.

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:iconrevanrockinfreak:
This is very well written, I don't like styles like iambic pentamiter, but you've written it very well while adhering to the stle, so my ace hat goes off to you!

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:iconhydramus:
hehe THANK YOU HUNNY! :D MEGA BIG! :hug: :D hehe, thanks, and i appriciate the fav :) and also i did cheat remember as the last line only has 5 syllables :) hehe

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"A painting may say a million words, but poems paint a million pictures" :D

~StarrMagazine - i also write for this.
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:iconhydramus:
Woo hoo! *throws hat into the air*... :D thanks!

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"A painting may say a million words, but poems paint a million pictures" :D

~StarrMagazine - i also write for this.
September 19th= National Pirate speak day :)
:iconrevanrockinfreak:
*catches hat and runs away* muhuhahaha, ahem, my pleasure also!

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