Oho. *puts on analysing hat*

Ok, right, so, yeah, well, it doesn't have to be about a person necessarily, does it? I mean, it could be, sort of the sonnet-love-praise-adoration thing, but that could just as easily be applied to anything...

I'm not getting very far here...

I don't know. It seems to me, since you write it coming back from Hong Kong and all, and since you have a deep emotional attachment to that place, that there's something about your feelings towards that in there. Especially the line "She keeps watching me Seeing it all, high in the sky Guiding me through the dark, dark night." which conjures up an image of being high up in the sky, in a plane, leaving the country behind. And it's "the dark, dark night" as you leave, but the land is illuminated with night-life that you can still see as you move away, and it's like 'she' is watching you as you go.

"Leaving me in a crazy, crazy daze
Like a lullaby for me to fall asleep."

I loved this line so much. Wonderful ending. The repetition on 'crazy, crazy daze', and assonance on the 'az' sound, gives a sort of langorous, drifting feeling, which links beautifully to the 'lullaby' of the last line. I can just see you there, on the plane, leaving Hong Kong behind, falling asleep, wheeling through the stars with the land all lit up with lights. It's beautiful. In my head. ^^

This is a wonderful poem, Josh. Really heartfelt and beautiful. I love the emotional core of it, and even if I'm completely wrong in my interpretation, it has a wonderful lyricism.

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Thinking hurts and thoughts don't rhyme

You know what? Thanks so much for the fav and loving it hehe, and with the last two lines, well you used that word again like today in english "assonance", i never use that word lol but you got it right with the idea of the "langorous" whatever the hell that means! and drifting feeling, i actually imagined myself mumbling those last to lines, sounds quite funny when i acutally do it. But it wasnt really suppose to be exactly like that, just thinking about something totally different actually but i loved your interpretation!! OMG it works so well, makes me think, if like Robert Browning came to our english lit classes and we told him what we thought his poems meant he'll probably be so confused he'd wanna go back to the 18th centary hehe. ^-^ but shall i tell you? well its actaully about the moon, its a love poem to the moon, but omg i still love your interpretation so much im gunna keep that in mind! hehe im glad i didnt mention the moon anywhere! cos omg that made perfect sense what you said and i love it hehe, you made me see my poem in a totally different way Dont think it wrong, cos i love it hehe Thanks! now that i've told you what the poem is really about, what do you think? hehe, but thanks for the effort too, its good practice anyways hehe, i do it all the time with other people's poems tehe . That vessel part too.. that was the moon, and when i think about it, wow it could be a plane hehe, sorry i said i'd be going now! AHHH!!!! thanks anyways ! .... oh why not! another one! hehe really big

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"A painting may say a million words, but poems paint a million pictures"

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September 19th= National Pirate speak day

I like the title, I think it's nice. I did think Bright Night when I read it though, God knows why. Bright Night - it was all the describing of your love as light, it was like the light of the dark sky, the light in the dark ...

And that made no sense.

"I could spend all night looking at you,
Staring back at the white sailing vessel,
Sailing away on a sea of bright stars,"

These were my favourite of favourite lines. I can just see it. Lying on a beach, with the waves just lapping at the shore, watching some boat type thing sail away with the woman/man of your dreams on. Beautiful image, if not a little sad.

*Gets all teary*

It's very good. I think it's pretty. Very pretty.

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Fuck me harder. No harder. Make me cry.

thanks another nice interpritation! hehe, i wish i didnt say anything in my post reply to Ellie's hehe and those lines are fantastic arent they? i actually do love the poem the more times i read it hehe Thanks and i do love the light, prefere it to the dark really hehe, well like in another poem i wrote i described the moon actaully making all of the grass kinda blue when it was pitch black with a full moon, i'll remember that, it was amazing imo hehe... and Thanks again

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"A painting may say a million words, but poems paint a million pictures"

~StarrMagazine - i also write for this.
September 19th= National Pirate speak day